Monday, June 27, 2011

Lost At Sea


Two lonely figures stand out in the rain
Shivering, cold, feel numb with pain
Their husbands, somewhere, lost at sea
Hang onto the hope of a recovery

The storm pounced from nowhere,
Like a ferocious beast,
Devouring all in its path,
Enjoying the feast

It churned up the sea, a massive swell
The dangerous motion was ringing the bell
Those fishing boats, so little and small
Were battered to pieces, one and all

The souls on board clung onto their lives
Conditions like those, who could survive?
The horrific show could be seen from the land
Spectators all praying, they would reach the safe sand.

The barbaric animal roared again
Dragging the men, deep down, to its den
It showed no mercy, this callous creature
The brutal actions of this water feature

Two determined ladies wait in vain,
Soaked to the skin by the pounding rain
Stand to attention, stare across the sea
Look in despair at the floating debris




The inspiration for this poem was taken from the above picture, which was published on www.creativewritingink.com

9 comments:

  1. Great story, and so dramatic.
    Wanda (cannot post from Wordpress)

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  2. Thanks Wanda.

    I struggled with the tenses this week, especially in the last stanza. I wasn't sure if I should write 'Standing to attention...... Looking in despair' What do you think?

    I really enjoy finding out how the picture inspires others. You and I have such different styles. I always say too much!

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  3. Moving story there... I was surprised because it didn't occur to me to look at the picture that way. I think it's really good as it is. Once again, thanks for the great read =D

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  4. No, Jewel! You never say too much! And your poems are so rhythmic. GREAT! Wanda

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  5. This picture is evoking different reactions this week! So many interpretations! It is great!

    Thank you so much Wanda and CBCondez. Your comments and kind words inspire me to keep on trying my hand at writing.

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  6. Thank YOU! I look forward to the next prompt, Jewel, and your next poem! Wanda

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  7. Aw, what a sad poem :( It´s funny how everyone´s writing can evoke different moods in the same photo. Great poem and well written! :)

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  8. This is really dramatic. And how sad! :(
    The way you wrote the poem, how the paragraph switched from the sea men drowning to the women waiting in vain. Very, very well done.

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  9. Thank you inky and Si_ulil.
    As soon as I saw this picture, I knew what my poem was going to be about.
    It isn't always so easy to get an idea and put it down on paper.

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