Paint pots are opened
The brushes are dipped
Summer's canvas of sunshine
Is torn up and ripped
An explosion of colour
Splatters the scene
Gone are the shades
Of vibrant green
Rustic colours, so bold and bright
Like a furious flame, in a fading light
Autumn is here
With all its grandeur
Nature has decorated
With an ardent fervour
This is my first post in a while.
It feels good to be back!
I love the picture, autumn is my
favourite season!
Thank you to creativewritingink for
providing another great prompt!
As always, your comments/criticisms
are welcome!
Very beautiful indeed, Jewel. Aren't you a painter? Wanda
ReplyDeleteYay, you're back!
ReplyDeleteAutumn is my favorite season, too, although I've never experienced/ seen it.
I love your poem especially this part: Summer's canvas of sunshine/ Is torn up and ripped// Something in it captures me and I can't tell what it is!
I look forward to reading more of your work. -- Cynthia
I just realized... the word canvas is in my poem, too! =D
ReplyDeleteFirst of all: WELCOME BACK!!!!
ReplyDeleteAnd what a nice way to celebrate your comeback with a poem to welcome autumn! This poem should be in a Hallmark card or website or something.
A quick thought: in the second verse, I was expecting something that rhymed with 'flame', so when I didn't find it, I was taken aback just for a tiny milisecond.
Other than that, it is beautiful. Again, welcome back, Jewel! :)
-si_ulil
Thank you for such a warm welcome!! It is really appreciated.
ReplyDeleteI wish I could paint Wanda, but trust me I can't!!
Cynthia, autumn is lovely in Scotland - if you wrap up warm! The colours are amazing! It is interesting that you also see nature as a bit of an artist, who requires a canvas to display her work!
Thank you too, si_ulil! I have some catching up to do with all of the writing that has been produced in the last few weeks! I'm looking forward to reading your work!
Your comment got me thinking! I was making every second line rhyme (or trying to!). Now that I have moved
'in a fading light'
onto the previous line, are you still looking for a word which rhymes with flame?
What does anybody else think?
comments are always appreciated, thank you again!
I like how you create the nuances of autumn by maintaining the continuity from summer to autumn.
ReplyDeleteYou capture the autumn essence very well.
Thanks for sharing. ^^
-dhitzunako-
Welcome back Jewel :)
ReplyDeleteI will be the one who left the writing world for a while now,got an exam to face soon. Will try to write once in a while.
I don't have any Rhyme objection like Ulil as I am still learning to rhyme.
I like the first verse a lot,sounds more powerful than the second verse. Great job Jewel
But...but...I'm not objecting to anything, Novroz and Jewel. I swear I wasn't!
ReplyDeleteI do have to say though, with the small change, it sounds better in my poem-novice ears. (just pretend that "poem-novice" is a word) :P
Looking forward to your next poems!
Hey si_ulil!!
ReplyDeleteI never took your comment as an objection at all!! I love your comments, they always get me thinking!! Keep them coming please!
Good luck with the exam Novroz and thanks for stopping by to read my work. I look forward to your return!
Thank you dhitzunako for your positive comments. I'm looking forward to reading more of your work
ReplyDeleteLovely how you describe it as paint and paintings! Great poem :)
ReplyDeleteBeautifully painted words bring peaceful frame of mind :)
ReplyDeleteHi wordcoaster
ReplyDeleteThank you for stopping by and leaving kind words. I look forward to reading your work!